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I missed viewing V1, but based on the comments, I will agree that V2 is a much better production. ^_^
For work on short notice, this is really great, and I enjoyed the pacing. I believe we can get this linked on the main page; more on that later.
You requested critiques, so my comments:
- There was too much black (dead time) in the opening. I know you were waiting for the musical cue, which is great, but something more to fill in the time would keep the suspense going. You started it well with "the time has come" but maybe it faded away too early. Or if the background could be some scenery ... i.e. empty field or night time or stars or space, to kinda keep us guessing as to what will come when the downbeat occurs.
- You said you were short on video resources, and it does show in the AMV. Shana's running scene felt a second or two longer than it needed to be. Hina's singing scene felt a little long (compared to the rest at least), too. And Shana overall had maybe 5-10 seconds more screentime in the AMV than Hina.
- I wouldn't remove any scene completely, though. All your choices were great; some had action while others had true moe appeal, so it's good to show all the best sides of the characters.
- I enjoyed the song choice. At the very end of the video, adding a fadeout would help rather than cutting it off.
- At the start, when you wrote in Hinagiku's and Shana's names, the font is okay, but doing some beveling/embossing or adding a border or increasing their size might help visibility. Kind of like how you put a border around "championship match" to make it easier to see. If that's hard to do in the movie program, you can make the text as an image and embed it similar to how you added the ISML logo.
Do update me if a V3 is finished!
Again, this is great work!
